I have talked with my teacher and below are her recommendations as well as the attached outline, paper I have, and the score report.
Articulation – needs to be reworded and fix grammar errors
a2 – . The two models need to be compared and separate paragraphs . With supporting cites.
b2 – i am a extrovert and this needs to show in this sections that the test does not align with my personality
b2a – discuss how this aligns with my career choice of pursing my masters to move upward into management. my relationships that are long lasting because I as a extrovert am spoken and set clear expectations.
b2b – . needs to discuss how me being a extrovert will give barriers when talking with introverts.
d1 – Needs better cited support for the 2 health care healing environments. Also need to split into two paragraphs with one talking about one environment and the other talking about the 2nd.
sources – need more soucres to support the paper.