0I just asked for revise another paper, please follow
1) exist many grammar mistake
2) please revise the paragraph of Methodology, research design and data collection, represent the secondary source and review of the literature in my proposal. (please see the example I sent to you below, on the 7th title: 7. METHODOLOGY, RESEARCH DESIGN AND DATA COLLECTION (240) My dissertation will mostly rely on secondary source of data or focus on providing a critical review of the literature in a certain field. However, in order to gather an in-depth understanding of the real situation, I may use qualitative research, such as interviewing OEM suppliers in Taiwan. The way is to set some hypothesis and to verify my assumption from their interview)
3) add one more page reference (at least three pages) , add some sentences in conclusion and recommendation paragraph.